This is a start, but I am having trouble hearing the sections in a pattern. You should have an A section that repeats back again, twice, with alternating sections in between (A B A C A). Each section should have ONE melody, a rhythm and a bass line or extra instrument part. Try keeping your favorite parts of this piece and rearranging them into the right form. You'll have a lot of work to do, but I'm confident you can do it! See me for help.