@Forsaken: Honestly, you're first version was better to me. Just cut your mids with the equalizer (after dropping in your master channel) and drop the volume of the whole track and you'll be good with the other one in my opinion. Your decision though...
Like the intro man. Pretty good track. Enjoyed it. I wish I could side by side the two tracks, so let me check the other one out right quick and get back to you.
Sounds much better? But let us see who else can give more input, but it is nice.