oh yea: it needs more effects, specifically reverb and eq, but more things too. if you sent me the .sng i would play around with it and i could show you what i mean and what to do
also: you did a good job staying in key. thats good. but the song does get a little repetative. you shouldve layered some more chords or a funky arp or something behind the main lead. i like how you changed it up at 2:02. and all of the drops shouldve had some sort of bassline, like even a sine wave would do. i like the actaul leads and sounds you chose tho. i cant tell if you sound designed them or not, but they're cool. keep this kinda stuff up its rlly good.
this is actually pretty good unless you didn't make the melody yourself, then its trash. feedback: I like you kick, it stands. also, you should pick a better clap and hi-hat in the drop. and in around :44 to :46 you should've had some snares as a sort of riser. and I'm not too sure the white noise in the drop in :46 works too well, you should've put a fakie on that and mixed it better.